Sunday, January 17, 2016

Favorite Lyric Erasure Poetry

For the longest time, I have collected journals full of favorite songs/lyrics.  I simply write them in journals and colorfully decorated composition notebooks.  Oftentimes I write in the margins what specific lyrics speak to me of personal experience.  I also my doodle, add my thoughts, whatever tickles the fancy of my muse as I'm recreating the music on paper.

I've had songs touch me.  Enlighten me.  Songs with lyrics that have truly spoken to me, that have resonated with me on some deeper level than mere audible experience, and I've carried the lyrics of those songs with me for years.

I've always wanted bring these song lyrics a new life, or perhaps what I wanted was to apply my own life experience to them.  To pull out of them exactly what they made me feel, the emotions they evoked, the messages they conveyed.  To create my own art from them.

And now, thanks to the lovely idea of Amanda Oaks (a poet I recently discovered via her Tumblr) I have found a way to do so through erasure poetry.  Sure, I have known of erasure poetry for years.  I have even written a few of my own.  I just never thought to use my favorite lyrics for them until I read Amanda's recent book Where'd You Put The Keys Girl, which was actually inspired by the lyrics of Tori Amos.

Oh, I know, be still heart!  Tori of my absolute favorite musicians.  Doubled with lyrics and erasure poetry and new ideas.  I haven't told this Amanda Oaks girl how much she's inspired me yet, but I surely plan to!

Anyway, back to my lyrics and poetry.  I'm a fan of Jewel, she was probably the first serious musician  that I could really sit down and listen to and feel I was being transported into the eye of someone else's experience.  I've had others do this for me:  Sarah McLachlan and Ani DiFranco (to name only my absolute favorites).


So it's no surprise that I decided to do erasure lyric poetry on Standing Still, one of my favorites by Jewel.

I created the image for the feel of an erasure effect.  I actually used a magnetic poetry app to create it.  Although I did first use a journal,  I like the clean cut image from the magnetic app best, though.   I also included the poem in typed form below.

I had an awesome time playing with this and hope to do many more.

Enjoy!  Maybe you can even try your own.

                                                         Darkest night
                                two headlights
the twilight
                dead end
I want you
I stand          still
on the stoop
    This hot summer night
Feel broken
like I need you
    You love me
                                A darkened sky
                The scenery
You pass                              by

Are                         passing me by.


  1. I love the result... The image of the dark night and the cars .. But even more I love the backstory.. How to use the lyrics.

    A few times I have tried to use them for glosa, which is a wonderful way to blend your voice with someone else.

  2. I kike the way this dissolved at the end...ambiguity, disappointment...certainly not the way dreams are supposed to come to us out of the night. Very good imagination here.
    Steve K.

  3. This is a nice poem, Stacy. I like the ending, sort of the last words of a two party failure.
    I've done a few erasure poems also. I could only find one but there were several. I also like spine poems. But I don't think of either as being too much of a literary accomplishment.

  4. The fridge poem works here -- the device -- because it's a running conversation with another, there is a response re-arranged on the door the next time we pass by. Or hope so ... this is wounded and fleeting and intense and bleeding out.

  5. I really like the close..

    Its so wonderful that a rearrangement of words brings out another beautiful idea with the same words.

  6. I love both the original and your take on it. I'm glad I'm not the only one who enjoys these erasure poems!
    Thank you for visiting me at :-)

  7. I like the way this poetic exercise turned out. great poem.


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