Tuesday, March 21, 2017

Yum!!! A Haibun

A Panoramic View of the City

Even in midwinter, California is pretty.  I remember China Town:  a snapshot behind my eyes, a city whose mouth I stuffed my dreams inside.  The huge, red-lit lanterns that swung across rope between a concrete walkway, weightless moons that coughed a yellow candle glow.

I recall the memory of my moving feet, swimming the fresh sidewalk of Fisherman's Wharf. On ten toes, I spun my snails' track across city corners and into the shiny, florescent glow of bakery windows and old-fashioned eateries.  The lights of their many windows shone like beacons for the tourist-weary.

Then the quick rush into a carpeted foyer;  the pedestrian-trample past a second-floor landing into a room sparkling of linen and mahogany.  I relished the meticulously-poured tea from authentic china cups that I imagine were once imported in wooden crates for many ocean-miles.  The specially-seasoned soy-fried Lo Mein that teased my tongue of a distinct flavor I could not remember.  Then the fresh smell of roasted duck that my vegetarian hands dared not touch.  But the taste of atmosphere was enough. San Francisco, a glowing ember out the window, the city lights a mirror of the starlit sky.  And the fresh dessert dishes with delicate miniature spoons meant for dainty slight-of-hand dipping.

Window-seat swimming sky,
the sweet tang of green tea ice cream,
and oriental scent.

*I usually do my haikus as 6 / 8/ 6.  This is a technique I learned from a book by Natalie Goldberg.  She titled it 'An American Haiku,' given the idea that American words contain more syllables than Japanese words.  Thus, I suppose she felt we were allowed one extra syllable per line.

Written for a prompt at dVerse Poets.


  1. I loved visiting Chinatown with you, Stacy. Thanks for taking me along. Interesting thought about the 6 8 6 haiku!

  2. I enjoyed the imagery you have created in your piece.

  3. beautiful expression on Chinatown's taste and colour and scents. Liked reading about the American haiku. BTW- I am another textbook Pisces! that aprt of your bio just jumped out at me. My blog https://alifelesslivedblog.wordpress.com/

  4. Your mention of green tea ice cream in the haiku reminds me of some Chinese restaurants we've been to. I think some also had a red bean ice cream selection. I remember Fisherman's Wharf but that was many years ago.

  5. I used to life in the Bay Area and it is a culinary delight, for sure. Thanks for sharing Goldberg's take on the haiku. I once heard a Japanese student talk about essentially the same thing.

  6. I do remember visits into Chinatown.. my first brush with more genuine cooking. Being no vegetarian I do love the duck, and have learned to take it if I can.

  7. I love the way you write, so atmospheric so vivid with the beauty of words. Thank you for this delicious treat.
    Kind regards
    Anna :o]


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